| 26 ~~ dmygphy ~~ yjijsh@dsifek.com ~~ fnBIDr sljpfunqddkr, [url=http: |
| 25 ~~ Elissa ~~ Eparsons13@hotmail.com ~~ 2011-10-04 00:47:55 I don\'t know how this doesn\'t have a million reviews. It\'s absolutely fantastic. I\'ve read it a few times now and love it more every time. |
| 24 ~~ icfbsqs ~~ tdijvx@ujwsoj.com ~~ HHRu3c uxfxlarapzbf, [url=http: |
| 23 ~~ lorealai ~~ lorealai@gmail.com ~~ 2011-05-31 17:57:15 Never mind. I have read the first part of the next chapter and all is explained. Making it seem like Harry was Imperiused while he is actually in full possession of his faculties was a brilliant move. Now if only the Side-along apparition could be addressed. |
| 22 ~~ lorealai ~~ lorealai@gmail.com ~~ 23 ~~ lorealai ~~ lorealai@gmail.com ~~ I haven\'t finished reading, but this story has been really well written so far, which is why some of the plot mistakes made really baffle me. You keep returning to the fact that Hermionie can\'t apparate. However, Snape can apparate, and all he would need to do is hold onto her arm and Side-along Apparate her with him. The other major plot point, which I have just come across, is Harry being placed under the Imperius Curse. While I understand you needed to get him out of the pub, Harry is able to resist the Imperius, as is evidenced in book 4 when \"Moody\" puts him under the curse. At the very least, you would need to show him fighting the curse and managing to overthrow it just before being Crucio\'d. These two major holes in the story detract from what is otherwise really enjoyable reading; I understand at this point in time it may be rather difficult to go back and revise the story, but I would like to understand exactly why someone who is getting the small thing |
| 21 ~~ Keyla ~~ emmanuelle.baud@free.fr ~~ 2011-05-12 15:32:09 Hey, sulbte must be your middle name. Great post! |
| 20 ~~ King ~~ gayle@dsn.org.nz ~~ 2011-05-12 14:55:28 Wow! Great tnhiikng! JK |
| 19 ~~ ngllwotze ~~ qamtvh@jkanof.com ~~ R1oMrE , [url=http: |
| 18 ~~ qoooqj ~~ wvodwo@cdypum.com ~~ 2011-05-11 21:30:27 A5XBna yxhzwxmkuvjv |
| 17 ~~ Carlye ~~ paul@canlaw.org.nz ~~ 2011-05-11 19:42:03 It was dark when I woke. This is a ray of snushnie. |